Shall I Compare Thee To A Summers Day? (My very own Shakespeare remix)

I took this photo the same day I last say her :)

I woke up one day with the first line of Shakespeares sonnet in my head and just couldn't shake it, there is of course someone to blame but thats between her and I. So anyway I decided to write my own version of the sonnet for her and I really hope she liked it.

First is the original sonnet just so you can get a feel for what I was doing and after the smile is my version. enjoy

Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?
Thou art more lovely and more temperate:
Rough winds do shake the darling buds of May,
And summer's lease hath all too short a date:
Sometime too hot the eye of heaven shines,
And often is his gold complexion dimmed,
And every fair from fair sometime declines,
By chance, or nature's changing course untrimmed:
But thy eternal summer shall not fade,
Nor lose possession of that fair thou ow'st,
Nor shall death brag thou wander'st in his shade,
When in eternal lines to time thou grow'st,
So long as men can breathe, or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this gives life to thee.

:)

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
Though, you are more lovely and beautiful in every way;
As all buds do bloom, and eventually sour,
your smile is grander than any flower;
The Summer may fade, and sun dull with winter
but the sparkle of your eyes, will never grow fainter;
Now Summer is gone, and you're not here,
still my thoughts of you, wont disappear;
Till Summer returns, and we are together,
the feeling of your lips, on mine, shall linger;
So long as men can breathe, or eyes can see
You will be amazing to me.